July 9, 2008, 3:07 pm
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Here is nice shoes that make you happy. It has a lot of differents color flower on them like spreadded the paint over. Even when you are sad, you will feel like being in the flower field by wearing these. Why don’t you forget about your trouble and go out with happy ones. The luck will come from your feet!!
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Well done. I can see colorful images in your texts. I am glad that you could upload a cute picture in this thread, as well. Please share this thread with your classmates in class.
Comment by advcomp July 11, 2008 @ 3:09 amWe shall go over the details on how to polish your work, if time allows.
When you resubmit, do not forget to title the thread each time.
Comment by advcomp July 11, 2008 @ 11:03 am> Here is nice shoes that make you happy.
a nice pair of shoes
that would make
nice –> too weak. nice and good are getting a little bit ‘dead’ words in modern usage
> It has a lot of differents color flower on them like spreadded the paint over.
Comment by advcomp July 11, 2008 @ 11:04 amIt has –> what does ‘IT’ refer to?
> Even when you are sad, you will feel like being in the flower field by wearing these.
feel like being
v.s.
feel like visiting
or
as if you were
fower field v.s. a flower garden
these –> a pair
> Why don’t you forget about your trouble and go out with happy ones.
Comment by advcomp July 11, 2008 @ 11:04 amgo out with –> carrying?
go out in such handsome pairs.
> The luck will come from your feet!!
OK
Have a great summer! Stay healthy in the summer. Good luck on your finals.
Comment by advcomp July 11, 2008 @ 11:05 am